Talk:Final Fantasy Agito/GA1

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Reviewer: IDV (talk · contribs) 15:06, 8 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Taking this on.--IDV^talk 15:06, 8 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Review

All right. Keep in mind that I have not played any Final Fantasy games (unless you count Mana).

Lead

There was a day-night cycle tied to the real-world time of day, and includes a social element - switches to present tense, and it is not said what the social element is included with.
whereby talking with a befriending certain characters - is that "a" supposed to be "and"? Or is one of "talking with" and "befriending" not supposed to be there?
The game, which acts as a companion to the original game, - is the original game Type-0, or does it refer to something else?
an alternate cycle of conflict - I don't know what this means.
The original protagonists - of Type-0? Or some other game?
Link Hajime Tabata.
the game had five hundred thousand registered users - is there a reason to not write it as "500,000"?

Gameplay

sets out on missions across Orience. - might be good to mention what Orience is here. I've already read the rest of the article, but if I hadn't I might have wondered if it was a town, a country, whatever.
but eventually is soon able to explore - I feel like "eventually" and "soon" aren't both needed - pick one.
Recurring creatures such as Moogles and Chocobos appear. - okay, so I recognize these names, but you might want to say that they're recurring creatures within the Final Fantasy series. Also, the sentence comes out of nowhere and ends very suddenly - Okay, so Moogles and Chocobos appear, but what are they, in what context do they appear? Maybe tie it together with the next sentence with a colon?
special control stick - Is this a virtual controller on the screen? Is there anything special about it, because that sounds like the standard way of doing "traditional" button controls on a touch screen.
The character's bedroom - "The player character's bedroom", or "The Cadet's bedroom".
The in-game time is also synchronized with real-world time. Like, if you play at night it's night in the game world? It's very sudden and doesn't really elaborate on how it works. Additionally, I don't think the word "also" is needed.
Might want to link side-quests to Quest (video gaming).
Successfully completing quests - "Successfully" seems unnecessary, unless it's possible for a quest to be marked as completed without the player succeeding at the task?
How does the job system work?

Setting and characters

Noticing that the Cadet is linked here, and not on their first mention.
Two other crucial characters - Not so sure that we should be calling something "crucial".

Plot

Explain that the game is split into phases before saying In the First Phase, - the reader doesn't necessarily know this yet.
What is Tempus Finis? My limited knowledge of Latin-based languages say it's the end of time, which seems to make sense, but please explain it.
What is a l'Cie?
Who is Cid?
The average English-speaker probably doesn't know what gaiden means.

Development

Explain who Tabata is, and link his name.
The average English-speaker probably doesn't know what TGS means - write out Tokyo Game Show, and link it.

Release

Link manga
Link re-spawn to Spawning (video gaming)

Episode table

What is the meaning of the "Chapter" in "Chapter (First Phase)"?
Is it necessary to write the platforms here? The game is only available on iOS and Android, so what other platforms could the release dates be referring to?

Post-release and legacy

The first hint of a localization appeared when the Agito trademark filed for European territories. When was this?
Later, at TGS, - Which TGS was this? 2013?

Looks pretty good. Placing this on hold for a week..--IDV^talk 16:12, 8 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

@IDV: I think I've attended to everything you pointed out. I also went through the gameplay section and did some present-to-past tense fixings, as this game is technically gone forever. --ProtoDrake (talk) 17:44, 8 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]

@ProtoDrake: Looks good! Passing this now.

--IDV^talk 23:58, 8 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]